1. This
paper had a good overall flow, it definitely had my attention from beginning to
end. Just a few sentences that were a bit confusing with word choice and I gave
suggestions for that on the hard copy.
2.
a. This
paper is formal, concise and very clear. This paper uses first person pronouns
in the abstract, introduction and discussion parts of their paper.
b. Pattern
errors in this report were the few errors in the sentences I had pointed out in
the hard copy. My suggestion would to be to just fix those words or maybe
rearrange the sentence to have it make more sense.
c. This
paper fulfills the length requirements and it also includes an “Appendix” and “References”.
d. This
paper did not follow the APA format, the things that are missing are the title
page, page numbers, and headings. There also isn’t much in-text citations
either.
3.
a. Abstract:
It mentioned major information from all the sections. It showed why this report
was important, what was done, what they found, and how their research finds
proved that their hypothesis was correct.
b. It
shows that this topic is important because of the deaths that are occurring because
people aren’t finding the help they need. The gap would be the differences in
the years the information was give. The intro does not state the research
question but it summarizes them a bit.
c. The
Methods section was good overall, it was very clear and easy to understand. A
suggestion I have for the participants section would be to include how they
chose their participants, if it was random people off the street or if they
posted it to a social media account.
d. Their
results section needs to have paragraphs explaining their bar graphs and their
findings from these results and explaining the major trends and providing data
to back up their information. The figures were good for the most part they were
numbered and had a caption at the bottom.
e. The
discussion connects to the findings they had stated in the introduction and it
also summarized the most important parts of the study which were that
individuals tend to keep things to themselves rather than look for help. It
also states the problems with the study methods. They explained that their implications
didn’t change from their original hypothesis.
4.
a. The
experiment provided sufficient data but it did not explain their results for
each question.
b. Yes
they did a good job at clearly indicating the study to understand the topic
5.
a. My
overall impression of this paper was that it was good at keeping my attention
and making me think more about this topic and how I can help others by reaching
out to them more when they are feeling down. Something you can improve on your
paper would be to elaborate more on your graphs. You can also fix the few
sentences that I pointed out in the hard copy. Lastly, add page numbers and a
heading to your pages.
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